Description

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Jenna, Tae, Mike, Matt

__**DESCRIPTION:**__ is to give a verbal picture of the character and event. // As a rhetorical mode, description is not often used as the primary method of development. We usually think of description as something that helps other rhetorical modes: for example, in a narrative essay, description can make the setting or characters more vivid. In an analysis, description can help us highlight the essential differences between two items we are discussing. //

__Example of Description__: //A Chorus Line (1975) :// In an empty theater, on a bare stage, casting for a new Broadway musical is almost complete. The field’s been narrowed down to just 17 dancers. For these men and women, this audition is the chance of a lifetime. It’s what they’ve worked for — with every drop of sweat, every hour of training, every day of their lives. It’s the one opportunity to do what they’ve always dreamed of. Not to be the star, but to get the job … to have the chance to dance and come through. But before the final cut is made, the director Zach asks each of them to talk about themselves. He starts by asking their name, age, hometown and reason for being a dancer. But Zach wants more than just their resumes. He wants to know about their families, friends, lovers, ambitions and careers. One by one, they come forward.

Some are shy or reluctant, while others are more than happy to reveal their innermost thoughts. From funny to heartbreaking, these 17 dancers share with us the stories of their lives. They put themselves on the line to get a job on the line. And when they’re done, so is the audition. And the final chorus line of 8 dancers is chosen.

Pg.1- Opening Scene //"The stage is completely bare, surrounded in black. There is a white line painted on the floor downstage parallel to the footlights. The house goes to "half"-then to black. A rehearsal piano is heard. As the stage lights come up, we see three lines of dancers in rehearsal clothes, facing dance mirrors upstage. (The upstage wall is made of three-sided revolving panels. One side black, one side mirror and one side the special ribbon deco design used in the finale only.)"//

Mockingbird by Eminem Lyrics from [|This site]
 * Jenna's Example of Description**

Yeah I know sometimes things may not always make sense to you right now But hey, what daddy always tell you? Straighten up little soldier Stiffen up that upper lip What you crying about? You got me

Hailie I know you miss your mom and I know you miss your dad Well I'm gone but I'm trying to give you the life that I never had I can see you're sad, even when you smile, even when you laugh I can see it in your eyes, deep inside you want to cry Cause you're scared, I ain't there? Daddy's with you in your prayers No more crying, wipe them tears Daddy's here, no more nightmares We gon' pull together through it, we gon' do it Laney uncles crazy, ain't he? Yeah but he loves you girl and you better know it We're all we got in this world When it spins, when it swirls When it whirls, when it twirls Two little beautiful girls Lookin' puzzled, in a daze I know it's confusing you Daddy's always on the move, mamma's always on the news I try to keep you sheltered from it but somehow it seems The harder that I try to do that, the more it backfires on me All the things growing up his daddy that he had to see Daddy don't want you to see but you see just as much as he did We did not plan it to be this way, your mother and me But things have gotten so bad between us I don't see us ever being together ever again Like we used to be when we was teenagers But then of course everything always happens for a reason I guess it was never meant to be But it's just something we have no control over and that's what destiny is But no more worries, rest your head and go to sleep Maybe one day we'll wake up and this will all just be a dream

//[Chorus]// Now hush little baby, don't you cry Everything's gonna be alright Stiffen that upper lip up little lady, I told ya Daddy's here to hold ya through the night I know mommy's not here right now and we don't know why We feel how we feel inside It may seem a little crazy, pretty baby But I promise momma's gon' be alright

It's funny I remember back one year when daddy had no money Mommy wrapped the Christmas presents up And stuck 'em under the tree and said some of 'em were from me Cause daddy couldn't buy 'em I'll never forget that Christmas I sat up the whole night crying Cause daddy felt like a bum, see daddy had a job But his job was to keep the food on the table for you and mom And at the time every house that we lived in Either kept getting broken into and robbed Or shot up on the block and your mom was saving money for you in a jar Tryna start a piggy bank for you so you could go to college Almost had a thousand dollars till someone broke in and stole it And I know it hurt so bad it broke your momma's heart And it seemed like everything was just startin' to fall apart Mom and dad was arguin' a lot so momma moved back On the Chalmers in the flat one bedroom apartment And dad moved back to the other side of 8 Mile on Novara And that's when daddy went to California with his CD and met Dr. Dre And flew you and momma out to see me But daddy had to work, you and momma had to leave me Then you started seeing daddy on the T.V. and momma didn't like it And you and Laney were to young to understand it Papa was a rollin' stone, momma developed a habit And it all happened too fast for either one of us to grab it I'm just sorry you were there and had to witness it first hand Cause all I ever wanted to do was just make you proud Now I'm sitting in this empty house, just reminiscing Lookin' at your baby pictures, it just trips me out To see how much you both have grown, it's almost like you're sisters now Wow, guess you pretty much are and daddy's still here Laney I'm talkin' to you too, daddy's still here I like the sound of that, yeah It's got a ring to it don't it? Shh, momma's only gone for the moment

//[Chorus]//

And if you ask me too Daddy's gonna buy you a mockingbird I'mma give you the world I'mma buy a diamond ring for you I'mma sing for you I'll do anything for you to see you smile And if that mockingbird don't sing and that ring don't shine I'mma break that birdies neck I'll go back to the jeweler who sold it to ya And make him eat every carat don't fuck with dad (haha)

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I chose this example because I didn't want to chose a sentence or paragraph that was descriptive and I wanted to do something different. This song is a good example of description because the language that Eminem uses helps to prove his point is very descriptively. He shows the hardships faced during his life and how he attempted to overcome them. He also uses story's about his life to engage the reader more.


 * Matts Example Of Description**

[] Molly Moon's Incrdible Book Of Hypnotism by Georgia Byng

"Molly Moon looked down a __her pink blotchy legs.__ It wasn't the bathwater that was making them __mottled like spam;__ they were always that color. __And so skinny.__ Maybe one day, like an __ugly duckling turning into a swan, her knockkneed legs__ might grow into the most __beautiful legs__ in the world. Some hope."

The description in this piece is used to show that Molly Moon isn't very beautiful and that her life so far is miserable as the author describes her as an ugly duckling with some not-so attractive features, (blotchy legs).

Narration also often follows description, like in this piece, "It was an ordinary Novmber evening, and she was in a shabby bathroom in a crumbling building."

WHY THE PATTERN WORKS! This pattern works because it allows the reader to develop a better picture in their head about what the author is trying to portray. Description comes in both words and pictures and helps the reader to paint a picture into their head. If you are reading a book and the author describes a character with vivid words, you are better able to picture the life of the character and what they look like than if you were just reading a normal sentence. ."

Works Cited Page:


 * "EMINEM-MOCKINGBIRD LYRICS." __Metro Lyrics__. 2004. 20 Oct. 2008 .
 * "Eminem." __Cool Buddy__. 20 Oct. 2008 <[|http://http://i11.tinypic.com/6obte9k.jpg]>.
 * Byng, Georgia. __Molly Moon's Incredible Book of Hypnotism.__ New York: First Scholastic printing, 2003.